The Official Writing Challenge
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Powerful in its subtility. A strong undercurrrent that rises in waves to meet our emotions reading this.
This is very powerful and heart wrenching.
What a wonderful tale of love and devotion. The grief was palpable.
You really did a beautiful job conveying this woman's new loss, the freshness of it,her mind and heart both vying to be in charge. I love that you use querido. A beautiful term of endearment hard to translate- so much more than darling. The only red pen thing I have to offer is to maybe lessen the repetitive thoughts/actions- but then, I think it adds a bit, too-- it's realistic to think it over & over. Nicely done.
02/28/10
Anyone who has ever walked a "million miles" around a bed that holds the body of a recently departed loved one will deeply identify with the words you have written. Your writing is both tender and strong.
03/03/10
Very touching. It conveys both human grief and heaven's peace and hope. Well written.