The Official Writing Challenge
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I read this to my little niece, and she loved it!
I can visualise a child bouncing up and down on his grandma's knee as she reads this chaotic story.
It wasn't anywhere near as bad as you let on in your hint!
I'm trying to see this thru a child's eye, and it still misses being a good children's story. The child asked for friends and other than the dog I don't see the other animals filling that bill. There is definitely a huh moment though. That is it's not making much sense.
An adorable story of a child's faith. I could see this as a picture book. Nice job!
What a delightful story. I can picture every word. Well done.