The Official Writing Challenge
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01/30/10
Ouch! Great ending. I enjoyed the way the story read, realistic teenage voice for the mc. You dialogue was also well done.
01/30/10
Ooh--you really "nailed" the topic! I like the skill with which you present teen thoughts / attitudes / actions. Great story!
02/01/10
Great message and the "huh?" moment is very satisfying! Good work!
02/01/10
Oh, I enjoyed this well written story. Perfect on topic and ending.
02/01/10
You did a fantastic job with Becky's character--very realistic. The "huh?" moment was well played, though the title gave it away a little. Well paced, and great writing with a spot on message. Excellent!
02/01/10
Great writing! Loved your story...perfect ending.
02/02/10
This was really good. I was surprised by the ending and that takes some doing. An excellent morality tale
02/02/10
Good lesson, and nice ending. I would have liked it even better if Becky had seen Helen and Brian together, instead of Helen boasting about Brian asking her out.
02/03/10
Wonderful story, especially the way teen sex is being portrayed on TV. Your story was well written and refreshing.
02/03/10
I could guess where it was going when Brian was polite enough to meet Becky outside her door. I enjoyed seeing what you did with it! Loved the ending! Brian and Helen were perfect for each other! And Becky certainly learned her lesson . . . there are some decent Christian guys out there who are ready to wait for marriage. :)