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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Oops (01/14/10)

TITLE: Alleviate
By Benjamin Graber
01/19/10


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I’ve spent so much of life on my knees,
To file away the little bumps
And add some dirt to little holes
Which have been made by my mistakes.

With “oopsies” here, and “whoopsies” there
I feel like Mr. Fix-it-Man,
Trying to heal my bumbling—
I want to fix it all with duct tape!

My greatest dream is to fix the world,
Alleviating all the pain—
But I have erred too many times!
A broken fake can’t change the world…

It’s not my job to heal the earth,
Or be the balm that soothes the heart;
There’s only One who gives the salve
That makes things calm in hurting lives.

And when I take this salve, I find,
That it can heal not just the world,
But every bump of my mistakes,
And it can seal up every hole!

No longer do I need to spend
My life upon my hands and knees—
Upon my feet, I find a future
And chase the dawn of all God planned…


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Janice Fitzpatrick01/22/10
SO true. I really like this one.:0)There is a time for praying and asking for forgiveness and guidance but then yes, we need to live His love and mercy, every day and share it with the world.:0)
Tessy Fuller02/08/10
I saw some of your comments on the boards and followed the link to this one. I love poetry so I thought I'd give it a read. I wasn't disappointed.

I really liked this line
"My greatest dream is to fix the world, Alleviating all the pain—But I have erred too many times! A broken fake can’t change the world…" especially that last line...

I did feel it should be a little longer, I think there was more that could of been said.

Amanda Brogan02/08/10
How easy it is for us to wish to fix all the world's problems when it's hard for us to even figure out our own! Jesus truly is the only One Who can heal our wounds and be the "balm that soothes hurting lives." A beautiful, truth-filled poem!
Julie Seeto02/11/10
Nice poem, Ben. I also followed your link from the boards.

I especially liked your fourth stanza - it had a soothing rythym to it.

And I loved the ideas expressed - too many times we try to do God's job of fixing things instead of letting him be the salve.

Great job.