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06/05/09
This is so deep. Strong vivid descriptions and a real sense of the pain the mc lives. love the way the letter to Daddy unfolds to reveal WHO she is writing to, This really touched me,
06/08/09
Very well written and powerful! Heartbreaking. Wow.
06/08/09
A parent's words can affect a life - I know someone who could be writing this diary. You are bang on topic. An interesting story. Thanks!
06/08/09
I really felt the heartbreak. But I was confused - maybe I was supposed to be - about the problem she was writing about. Was it her mother's expectations or was it an eating disorder?
06/08/09
What a sad story that is too many times true. The mc made the reader feel her pain. Good job.
06/08/09
This is gripping to me. I'm afraid it speaks for many young girls under so much pressure, even from parents, to be perfect. How good to know a Father Who understands and loves each one exactly as they are. May this message get across to many who need it.
06/09/09
Very touching, Sara! Many times I had some feelings like this when I was a teen. A mother's words hold so much power and often, Moms don't know how those words can sting long after they have been released in anger or frustration. Such a bitter/sweet journey as a teen!
06/10/09
What a real and heartbreaking job of portraying a young girl who desperately needs a mentor. You made me really care about her--she seems so isolated, confused and lonely. Good job.
06/10/09
So similar to one I recently wrote...so, I know the emotions/pain. Hard to write, isn't it? And yet, we go on with hope and renewed desire to do it differently ourselves.
Good writing.
Mona
06/10/09
Heart-breaking and gripping. The words the mother and father will never see cry out to the reader.
06/10/09
Totally gripping. You drew me in - incredibly real. And she is crying out to the Lord. Most of us weren't size 5 when we were born but it shared the angst. Powerfully written.
06/11/09
The "bitter" part of this week's topic was easy to find...but the only "sweet" part was that candy bar near the end. Good job, although sad...and I can empathize because - Been There/ and Done That
06/11/09
Oh honey - this is INTENSE and amazingly descriptive and engaging. You tugged at my heartstrings, sweetheart. Excellent.