The Official Writing Challenge
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08/02/05
Wow, I liked the ending, I really wasn't sure if he'd get away or not.
Fear, uncertainty, hope, terror, rescue - it's all here! A testimony to the sovreignty of God! Good job.
08/03/05
That's what I was waiting for--suspense, action, a little bit of how the underground could work in secrecy. Good story..nice entry! God bless ya, littlelight
08/04/05
Really good storyline - enjoyed it very much. One question - how did Jared know his dad was talking to police? Did he see them somehow? A good read!
Suspense! Then I was at the end before I knew it! Great story well told!
08/06/05
Nice spin on this topic! Very well crafted! Good Job!
08/06/05
:) Can't wait to read more....
08/06/05
Clever. Very realistic having the kid crack the electronics.
08/06/05
Loved this! It had everything! Very well crafted and suspenseful!
This is definitely a winner in my book! Suspenseful, and could be expanded into a novel for adults...are those the plans? Causes a parent to stop and think about whether all has been done to reach their children. Whew!! Thank you!
08/09/05
Don't know how I missed this one Amy. Enjoyed it as much as the first. Great imagination and well crafted, suspenceful, story that was definitely on the topic.