The Official Writing Challenge
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It's sad when dreams are shattered. You told this story simply yet poignantly. I love the repeat in the first verse to the last.
I enjoyed reading through this a few times. Really well done!

Too bad there is a typo in the last stanza

Like THE life that they show.
Sad this so often reality in a family. I admire story-telling within a poem like you have.
04/28/09
Oooh, the imagery of the white lilies and orchids from the first stanza to the last is just perfect.
04/28/09
You did a nice job with this poem chronicling the lifespan of a marriage. The story you tell is such a sad but common one, and I'm sure too many people are able to relate to it. I like the way you tie your tale together with the white orchids and lilies at the beginning and the end. :)