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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Beginning and End (04/16/09)

TITLE: White Lillies and Orchids
By Joanney Uthe
04/22/09


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White lilies and orchids,
Pink dresses and bows,
The guests have arrived,
Keeping Mom on her toes.

There’s cake to be eaten,
And punch to be drank.
Gifts to be opened,
So the guests they can thank.

The honeymoon was fun,
They had a good time,
But money is tight,
And they spent every dime.

Their households they combined,
To make their lives one,
Each chore is now shared,
But that makes it more fun.

His job is demanding,
He’s working more hours,
She wishes he’d think,
To send her some flowers.

Her belly is swollen,
A baby within,
His face is aglow,
With a proud, silly grin.

Soccer practice at four,
Piano at five,
By bedtime at ten,
She feels barely alive.

His job includes travel,
To places afar,
Business is booming,
Expensive is his car.

Time together is rare,
Conversations brief,
More often than not,
They end up causing grief.

The fighting escalates,
Can’t take anymore,
One day he decides
To walk, slamming the door.

Alone, her and the kids,
A new life to start,
A vow now broken,
That they never would part.

White lilies and orchids,
Wedding dress and bow,
Wilted and wrinkled,
Like they life that they show.


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Ruth Ann Moore04/23/09
It's sad when dreams are shattered. You told this story simply yet poignantly. I love the repeat in the first verse to the last.
Tallylah Monroe04/27/09
I enjoyed reading through this a few times. Really well done!

Too bad there is a typo in the last stanza

Like THE life that they show.
Joy Faire Stewart04/28/09
Sad this so often reality in a family. I admire story-telling within a poem like you have.
Jan Ackerson 04/28/09
Oooh, the imagery of the white lilies and orchids from the first stanza to the last is just perfect.
Myrna Noyes04/28/09
You did a nice job with this poem chronicling the lifespan of a marriage. The story you tell is such a sad but common one, and I'm sure too many people are able to relate to it. I like the way you tie your tale together with the white orchids and lilies at the beginning and the end. :)