The Official Writing Challenge
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03/19/09
wow! I mean WOW! you had me hooked from the get go and it never let go. Love the journal entry style of writing here. Love the wry humor injected. Could really see this commune in the woods as I read. the ending was perfect!!!

one little tricky part in the end where she says they are coming to the end of their funds and she thanks God for that. It sounds just a little backwards... is she thanking God for reaching the end of their funds or thanking God for Brad's job in the nick of time? Might want to work that around so its clearer.

Really really good story!
03/19/09
Very creative in "journaling" as your entry. Felt the hopelessness and then the false hope and then the REAL hope! Well done!
03/22/09
Great job. Clear thinking.
03/23/09
Wow! Very creative and interesting...a unique way to approach a well-known passage of scripture. I enjoyed the "diary" approach!