The Official Writing Challenge
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I like the story. Still trying to relate it to the topic, yet glad I took time to read it. :)
You are correct. The whole gift connection is right there near the end and I missed it. So Sorry. :)
11/26/08
You handled this well, from the description of the dreary streets, the angst and pressures of 'modern living' and the desperate wishing that the world's problems would just disappear. The suspense created by the 'one away' was a good hook, and you didn't let us in on what it meant too soon. I wonder if the ending would be stronger if you had the MC DOING something to show her repentance? Just a thought.
11/30/08
Good flow to a great story. Nice to see you back writing (and commenting on others' submissions).
Nice reminder for the "Holydays".