The Official Writing Challenge
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08/22/08
Yikes--good one!
08/22/08
Wow - I didn't see that twist coming! I thought Jared was a Christian at the start. A good lesson - We need to help those in need, before someone else with not so good intentions gets there first!
08/23/08
Uh oh. This give me an icky feeling as to how easy it is for the evil one to deceive. Some really excellent writing here.
08/25/08
An excellant example of a charade too many fall into. A ? mark after "What did she have to lose" and "Why not", with one spelling error noted (spell check might have pick these up). I really liked the flow and the message.
God blass and keep writing.
08/26/08
Very good story. Jared seemed nice enough during most of the story until the end. Then we see who he really is. Nicely done.