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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Uncles/Aunts (04/17/08)

TITLE: The Rodeo Romance
By Dianne Janak
04/19/08


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Uncle Roy
from Illiniois
met Aunt Anna
from Montana
At a rodeo in Texas
on a cold and starry night

Young Roy the clown
with painted frown
Saw Aunt Anna
wear bandanas
The night she rode a crazy bull
His heart stolen at first sight.

One night uncle
broke his knuckle
Distracting bulls
by push and pulls
As Anna ran to safety
With her nerves all tense in fright.

“Are you ok?”
She was dismayed.
Now viewing Roy,
not just a boy,
As the medics fixed his knuckle
And suggested he sit tight.

“I was so scared,
thank God you cared,
To rescue me
and help me flee.
Bull was raging, I was running
I just knew he’d take a bite.”

“Let’s go to dine,
at half past nine,
Take off your face,
save me a place,
At that Denny’s round the corner
Please say yes to my invite.”

Poor Roy was mute,
in his clown suit,
If this a dream,
it seemed extreme,
Loving Anna from a distance
Seemed to Roy to be just right


Our poor young Roy,
now being coy,
Was in a fix,
With no clown tricks,
His face hiding behind makeup
Huge red scars, an ugly sight.

He had no choice,
he found his voice,
“I will await,
our dinner date,”
Our brave man Roy met our Anna
At the Diner in bright light.

Roy was sweating,
and was betting
That his fair chance
for this romance
Would elude him as Anna gazed
On his scars with shock and fright.


As she approached,
he clung to hope
That she’d conceal
her need to squeal
And thus become a lifelong friend
With compassion for his plight.

“I know its pride,
that’s why I hide,
My face in shame,
no one to blame,
Somehow I knew you would be kind
And not cower at my sight.”


Eyes filled with tears,
she was all ears,
“Relax, my friend,
I won’t offend,
God teaches me to look at hearts
Your sweet soul is drenched in light.”


Love birthed in joy,
For clown boy Roy,
And our Anna
with bandanas,
Been married now for fifty years
In God’s family, their delight.


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Rebecca O'Connor04/24/08
I love whimsy done well with wit. This was a fun read and I have total belief in the event!
Shirley McClay 04/24/08
I am not a poet not do I have any great interest in poetry, BUT... this was awesome!! I read every word and wanted MORE! It sounds like a ballad that could easily be set to some fun music. Excellent job.
Beth LaBuff 04/24/08
I love your title. Your poetic elements are great. I enjoyed this rodeo romance… with excellent creativity and an all-around fun story. I especially liked this, "for clown boy Roy." :) Great work on this.
Benjamin Graber04/28/08
This one is cute! You did a good job using rhymes to add to the humor...
I thought some of the rhymes sounded a little forced, since you managed to rhyme the last line in every stanza, which had to be quite a challenge!
Great job - keep up the good work!
Jan Ackerson 04/28/08
Very lovely, Dianne. This really resonated with me, as I have a daughter very much like Roy who was afraid no one would ever see beyond her disability. Just precious!
Debbie Wistrom04/28/08
No red ink from me. I loved this engaging well rhymed entry. LOOOOVED IT!
Chely Roach04/28/08
This was playful but serious...I loved it!
Willena Flewelling 04/29/08
I'm not a poetry person either, but this was a pleasure to read. Great job!
Lynda Schultz 04/29/08
I enjoyed this. The poetry might have been a little forced in spots, but the story itself and the flow was very good.
Dee Yoder 04/30/08
Love this: "Your sweet soul is drenched in light"

Well written and lovely. You captured the heart of the person who wants to love, but is so afraid of being rejected.
Joy Faire Stewart04/30/08
Oh, this is wonderful and great message. Love it!
Sara Harricharan 04/30/08
Awww! So sweet! (The last line was a tad awkward) but the rest of it flowed nicely and was very cute! Especially at the end. I loved the Anna's bandanana's. Very well done! ^_^
Joanne Sher 04/30/08
Just delightful, Dianne. A fun read with a wonderful message.
Loren T. Lowery04/30/08
Loved the story this poem told. Three cheers for love's victory that sees the heart bathed in light.
Beth LaBuff 05/01/08
Dianne -- Wow! Congrats on your level placing with this! Way to go!!!
Sheri Gordon05/01/08
Congratulations on your 3rd place. This is very creative.
Myrna Noyes05/01/08
CONGRATULATIONS, Diane! I knew I would like it as soon as I read:

"Uncle Roy
from Illiniois
met Aunt Anna
from Montana" !!

Poetry can be tricky to write, but you did an excellent job and managed to convey your story and its message very clearly. Well-done! :)

Mandy White05/01/08
Oh, I admire poets so! this was a delightful read. Congratulations!
David Butler 05/04/08
What a delightful story! Such a unique poetic form too.
Poetry can be such hard work, finding the right rhyme and pulling the whole story together so it flows well. It takes courage as well as creativity. You demonstrated an abundance of both. I'm not sure that I could break out of traditional poetic form like you did here.
I agree with the above comments, however, that a few rhymes were a bit awkward, but I feel you got away with it due to the general appeal of the story itself. Most readers look for consistency, so I find I have to think laterally when a rhyme doesn't look right. It takes years of experience, playing with words. But this is really good.