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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Actions Speak Louder than Words" (without using the actual phrase). (02/21/08)

TITLE: Call Me If You Need Me, OK?
By Mariane Holbrook
02/27/08


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CALL ME IF YOU NEED ME, OK?

“Just call me if you need me,” purred my friend just down the hall.
“I know I haven’t been here since you had that awful fall.
I’ve had you on my mind and also in my prayers,” she said.
“The first report we’d heard was people saying you were dead!”

I listened as she told me of the latest news in town,
About the women who’d gained weight and those who had slimmed down.
She told me who was dating and whose marriages had failed.
She told me of a friend’s arrest and all that it entailed.

My broken leg was hurting; I was restless on my bed.
I thought she might be leaving but her voice droned on instead.
“Our preacher is so boring, folks are leaving left and right;
And at the deacon’s meeting, there broke out an awful fight.”

She finally rubbed her eyes and said she guessed she’d better go.
“I’m just so very busy I can barely say ‘hello.’
I’ve seen you in the hallways and I know you live alone.
I should have stopped in sooner or just called you on the phone.”

When she was gone, I took a nap and woke to muffled noise.
I thought it was the yard boy our apartment head employs.
But it was in my kitchen, and I soon smelled baking bread;
A dear friend had arrived just making sure I was well fed.

She hadn’t asked permission; in fact, hadn’t phoned at all.
She hadn’t missed a day in coming since I’d had that fall.
She planned my meals, then grocery-shopped, and cooked and baked for me,
Then served it with my favorite drink: a pitcher of mint tea.

She stayed for just a while each time, afraid that I might tire.
She’d put a load of washing in, then place it in the dryer.
I’d see her with a dust mop and a broom to clean my place
And just before she left, she’d lock me in a warm embrace.

----
So now it’s one month later and my friend from down the hall
Has not been back to visit or had time to even call.
Kind words are very welcome when a friend is in great need,
But when you put some legs on words, you are a friend indeed.


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Holly Jensen02/28/08
I love this. I might look at the rhythm a little bit, but that could have had to do with my screen reader. A beautiful illustration of the topic.
LauraLee Shaw02/29/08
I LOVE a great story put to rhyme. Your message is outstanding and one more Christians need to hear. I hope this has a profound affect on all who read it. Well done.
c clemons03/03/08
Well done!
Debbie Wistrom03/03/08
Loved the last line, such a great truthful message here. Keep up the good words.
jodie banner03/03/08
A great message.I too stumbled a bit on the rythym but otherwise very good.
Joanney Uthe03/03/08
I like how the "words" included words about everyone and everything else. I don't think she would have heard if you did call. I love how the other friend was just there, doing what needed to be done. Great poem.
Marita Thelander 03/03/08
I like words with legs. Leggy words indeed.
Words with legs that run to me
when I am in need.

Good job with the topic.
Jan Ackerson 03/03/08
Very well done--rhyme and meter spot on, a super story and an important message.
Lynda Schultz 03/03/08
Great take on the topic and a valuable lesson for sure.
Joanne Sher 03/04/08
I have lived this - you hit it spot on, and your rhyme and meter are great. This blessed me, Marianne.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/04/08
You hit the topic straight on, dear Friend, in this delightful poem that shows not only a contrast between who cares and who doesn't but also reveals how a Christian should act. Your rhyme and meter are just right. I loved it.
Jacquelyn Horne03/04/08
How well most will be able to relate to this apt poem. Right on topic.
Edy T Johnson 03/06/08
You have such a way with words,dear friend! Your word pictures are vivid in this reader's mind and you manage to get the message across in a lilting dancing format. Another keeper!