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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “All that Glitters is Not Gold” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/24/08)

TITLE: Little Girl Dreams
By Verna Cole Mitchell
01/24/08


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When I was just a little girl,
What visions would I see
Of days in far off future years,
That famous I would be.

Imagined I, myself on stage,
With lovely voice so loud,
I’d knock the socks off of the folks
In an admiring crowd.

The songs I practiced as a child,
The catchy tunes in rhyme,
My mother said were worldly ones
And were not worth my time.

“Slow Boat to China” did I sing.
I’d croon out “Five Foot Two,”
But Mom would stop me when I’d get
To “could she woo and coo.”

I’d twirl around on roller skates
And turn and twist and glide,
While dreaming of the praise I’d get
In roller rinks worldwide.

To dive like Esther Williams could
Was something that I yearned,
But sadly, that was not to be--
To swim, I never learned.

I fancied I might be a star
In movies or TV,
As popular as Doris Day.
Now how cool could that be?

And if I failed at all of these,
I’d take up some great cause,
Then be renowned for nobleness.
And gain the world’s applause.

A wife, a mother, teacher, too,
Those are what I became.
In God’s will I have happiness
That could not come from fame.


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Joanne Sher 02/01/08
Delightful and fun. I think you have "dated" yourself (if this is who I think it is LOL). A very fun read.
Benjamin Graber02/01/08
I really like the message of this one - sometimes the dreams we think are "smaller" are actually where true happiness can be found, if they are part of God's perfect plans.
I would suggest that watch your rhymes; the line "That famous I would be" sounds unnatural, like it the rhyme was forced.
Keep up the good work!
Blessings,
Ben
Sherry Castelluccio 02/02/08
What a fun poem! I think we all have high hopes like that. Then we kind of have to come to terms with reality and just thank God for what we have. I love how the words flowed so well together, though I must admit, I don't know who most of those people are! I guess I have some homework to do, lol. Great poem :)
Joy Faire Stewart02/02/08
I read this poem aloud and loved it! So true to life and right on topic. Excellent writing.
Peter Stone02/04/08
Cute poem of the vain imaginings of youth that we have all experienced.
Jan Ackerson 02/05/08
Excellent! You're becoming one of my favorite FW poets.
Beth LaBuff 02/05/08
Your title is perfect. I love the little girl dreams. I think we (girls) can all relate to this. I played "Five Foot Two" on the organ growing up. :) Very nice work on this.
Karen Wilber 02/05/08
Thank you for this - especially the last stanza. I could relate to the little girl dreams and now I entertain my kids.
Linda Watson Owen02/06/08
Oh, dear friend! This is so precious in every way! What a delightful poem with just the right mix of wit, fun, and profundity! You write in such an appealing and engaging way! Like all of your admirers, I love your style too. You're a pro!
Laury Hubrich 02/06/08
Love this poem. I remember "skating" around my living room with the Olympics. And then we grow up! Great job!
Laury
Leigh MacKelvey02/06/08
Great work with a story-telling poem. Kudos!
Loren T. Lowery02/06/08
I'm smiling at the simple perfection of this poem. Your work continues to amaze and inspire me.
Sara Harricharan 02/06/08
Aww! This reminds me of wanting to 'be' those very same people! Right now I'm probably rooting for the 'big cause'. ^_^ You're really, really good at this, Verna! Another lovely piece! ^_^
Holly Westefeld02/06/08
In my book, being
"A wife, a mother, teacher, too,"
Is a great and noble cause, always worthy of applause.
Sheri Gordon02/06/08
Beautiful, Verna. So simple, and so true. The voice and meter were perfect. Excellent example of this topic.
william price02/06/08
Linda, my dear Linda...What a poet you are. I've been learning a little here and there about the mechanics of the art, and from what I can tell, this was spot on perfect, besides meaningful and WORTH the time. Excellente! God bless.
william price02/06/08
Of course I meant. Verna, my Dear Verna... (:
I'm gettin' old sister, way old. Forgive me (:
God bless.
Pat Guy 02/06/08
You nailed it with this one Verna! It's so perfect! Topic/story in rhyme/intertaining - all of it. Loved it Verna.