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TITLE: The Fearful Yellow Sky | Previous Challenge Entry
By Thomas Kappel
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boiling, churning, rolling,
stretching high to reach
up to the edge of space
sucking in and filling
with raw energy from the
heaven and earth
to strike out in every direction
and within
with the slapping hair raising
snap of stored power and the
release of unnatural brightness
and overwhelming sound.
Advancing, it sucks in
and consumes the
natural light and energy
announcing it’s pending
arrival with the
fearful yellow sky.
And then
like some silent stalking creature
darkness slowly consumes
that pale yellow sky
leaving the world
cloaked in
unholy darkness
The moaning begins
quietly, slowly,
at first
than
trees bend and
sand and dirt
streak through the air
as the quiet gentle
warming breeze
becomes a violent wind
and the ground begins to shake
as the crashing voice of thunder
adds its massive
sound to the cry
and pain of the
storm.
And the earth
and the sky
scream out
in unison
with flashes of
blinding white
dreadful light
as
He’s gently lifted
off the cross
and the veil of the
temple
is rent asunder
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snap of stored power..." Wow, your free verse utterly gripped me, brimming with internal rhyme and brilliant imagery! A tiny part of me was searching for a bit more reference to the emotion of fearfulness in the observers...But that didn't diminish the beautiful dynamics of your poem. I especially enjoyed your contrast at the end, where He is "gently" lifted off the cross and the veil of the temple rends violiently in two!