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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)

TITLE: His Heart Is Sad
By Verna Cole Mitchell
07/30/07


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When God sees deeds of darkness done
Of violence or greed,
Or watches those who bear His name
Ignoring souls in need,
…..His heart is sad.

When God sees how His Word’s reviled,
His holiness denied
By those who say, “There is no God,”
In their own sinful pride.
…..His heart is sad.

When God sees some who carelessly
Make curses from His name,
Or denigrate the Trinity
With neither guilt nor shame,
…..His heart is sad

When God sees people cheat and steal
And lie disgracefully,
When He observes the sordidness
Of immorality,
…..His heart is sad.

When God sees children lack respect
For father and for mother,
Or when He sees the enmity
Of brother against brother.
…..His heart is sad.

When God sees there are petty quarrels
Within His family,
The members of His bride, the church,
Disputing shamefully,
…..His heart is sad.

When God sees folks neglect His Word
And then forget to pray,
Or turn from living as they should
To drift from Him away,
…..His heart is sad.


For God created man to live
With Him in harmony.
He sent His Son to die for all
That we might be sin-free.


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Joanne Sher 08/02/07
Love the repetition of the verse, and the wonderful images in each stanza. Your last stanza is also a gem! This is convicting on so many levels - and masterfully crafted.
Jan Ackerson 08/05/07
Excellent poetry, with everything a good poem should have--very effective use of repetition, too.
Allison Egley 08/05/07
Oh, this was great. I loved it.

The only thing I might suggest is to tie in that last stanza to the others by changing the line "His heart is sad" a bit and adding it to the end. Maybe to "Our hearts are glad" or something like that.

I liked the repetition of the line "His heart is sad." It was very effective and made everything fit together well.

Linda Watson Owen08/05/07
Beautifully done! You've put a wealth of truth into a clear, straight-to-the-heart-and-mind poem! Bravo!
Betty Castleberry08/05/07
This reminds of the hymn, "He." The message is very similar.
I always loved that song, so it was easy for me to love your poem, too. Good rhyme, and good message. Well done.
Dee Yoder 08/05/07
A good reminder of the way we should try to live so His heart is glad, instead of sad.
Rita Garcia08/07/07
A heartfelt message to embrace and lead us closer to Him. Perfect in every way!
Bonnie Way08/07/07
Beautiful poem!
Dara Sorensen08/08/07
Great repetition and great imagery! Well done ^_^
Janice Fitzpatrick08/08/07
Yes, amen! So true. Well written. Sometimes we forget just how sad God must feel when mankind flits life away and destroys what God has created.I really like this one hon.
Caitlynn Lowe08/08/07
Very nicely written.
Sara Harricharan 08/08/07
Your title says it all. What a bittersweet and wonderfully written poem. Good job. ^_^
Loren T. Lowery08/08/07
We took the same approach this week on this topic - I really like the way you were able to capture it so meaningfully in poetic form.
Wonderful job.
LaNaye Perkins08/08/07
You did a great job of expressing the sadness God feels in this poem. Great writing.
Julie Arduini08/08/07
I loved the repetition. This was a great message woven throughout.
Kristen Hester08/08/07
This is wonderful! It was so moving and convicting to hear the things that make God sad. Great job.
Mariane Holbrook08/09/07
This is such a good entry. I so wish it had won; it's that good. Your poetry flows so beautifully without being forced and it's such a pleasure to read! Very well done, my friend.