The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh, the turbulant waters of the pre-teen! There's a good moral to your story which your main character, grudgingly, gets. I confess to wanting him to act more enlightened, but your version is probably the most realistic!
Now this one was definitely written from experience .. let me guess, it was either you as a kid, or something you've wanted to do on your kid for a while :)? Very realistic.
I may just have to steal this in a few years! I loved it - but I'm curious what a child might think of it. Great detail.
This is a well-written story that kids will enjoy, but they won't tell their parents about it!
Oh Steve, you poor thing. When I saw your brick I just had to come read your story. #1 - because your brick was so late I thought maybe no one would read it and #2 - your first entry in Masters! Yay! I remember my first entry in Masters - I slaved over it like my life depended on it. I felt as if I were going to be eaten alive.

I like your story. You have no idea how many times I've been tempted to use this tactic with my 15-year old. You do have one tiny typo which should not make a difference. If you don't know where it is, PM me and I'll let you know so you can fix it.

Throughout you have the perfect "voice" for a middle schooler. But then again, you probably already knew that. :)

And the last paragraph is perfection. A wonderful ending.

Love and blessings, Teri
Well written and the ending is perfect!
Tommy has the perfect voice. I've used the line on my kids so many times: "Well, I don't feel like cooking for you or washing your clothes, etc." when they say they don't feel like doing something (chores, homework, etc.). Of course, I always give in and do cook and wahs for them. Maybe If I didn't, they would learn. Great story!
Not too bad. A little predictable though! I liked that he did get good marks for the poetry assignment after all. Great story!
First wanted to stop by and welcome you to Masters and to thank-you for the comment you left on my kid's article last week.
In your "Lesson Learned" I think you captured the teen's "voice" so well. I sensed a good kid hiding inside and the parent's did a good, and honest job in bringing this out. Keep up the good work and look forward to reading more of your challenges.
Good show, Steve! You're obviously in your element, Master's wise and story-wise. Keep doing what you're doing and you'll be Best of the Best, yet.

I enjoyed reading your story, and the tension between the boy and his united-front parents. Great object lesson, learned!