The Official Writing Challenge
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05/31/07
Yes, I loved the humor through out! It ended quickly with some questions but it kept me going all the way through. Great dialogue that showed the character of your characters! ;)

I thoroughly enjoyed this adventure! Wished I'd thought of it!
Fun entry! I didn't quite get the ending and there were a few grammer issues, but otherwise solid story with a bit of humor. Good job!
06/01/07
Good voice! (through should be 'threw') Nice pace and great action - I didn't get the ending too well - did you mean the woman reminded him of an old girlfriend he didn't like??
06/02/07
LOVED the sarcasm!! I was hooked from the beginning.
06/04/07
I liked this! Did have some questions, but it kept my interest. :) Very fun story.
06/04/07
This is great, atmospheric--I can see it as an old film noir...and the twist ending just cracked me up! Good job!
06/04/07
Great description, and I love the ending too. This read as "seat-of-your-pants" as you wrote it (and that is a good thing!).
This is another great read; I enjoyed it! I just think you needed another couple thousands words! :-)
Nicely done. Loved the humor and how you brought the reader through the alleyways and aboard a ship with your descriptions and dialogue. The ending is a suprise and I don't blame him a bit.:0)Grin. God bless your talent.Keep up the writing!Janice
Not sure if you're familiar with Douglas Adam's work, but this reminded me a bit of that. Tongue-in-cheek humor is the way this amusing adventure came across to me. Your writing style and dialogue kept my interest the whole way through.
I absolutely loved your adventure--would be interested in the sequel. Of course, they have to fall in love! The humor here is delightful.
This was fun. I like the fact that you gave your MC a not so common name. Makes him stand out. I also like the subtle humor. Nicely done.
I felt like I was there. I would read this book!
06/06/07
Cute title and nice character. Lander is very interesting and I love his dry sense of humor, especially at the end. Very well done. ^_^
Loved this. Especially the ending. Great job.
06/06/07
Love the old black and white detective movies of the '30's and '40's and that's what your story reminds me of...I'd like to "see" the rest of the movie!
06/07/07
Love it, from the great title to the perfect ending!