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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the ADVENTURE genre (05/24/07)

TITLE: Malus Domestica
By Joanne Sher
05/29/07


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Malus Domestica

I don't know why, but I've always felt I was special. While my friends would hide behind leaves or branches, I was born with the desire to be noticed. So, when a man grabbed me out of my tree and put me in a crate, I knew my life would change dramatically, and for the better.

It was quite a boost being in that box. I knew I was superior. I didn't have a blemish, I was perfectly shaped, and my color was uniform. There wasn't a specimen in that crate that could compare.

Once at the grocery store, I was beaming. I knew I'd be away from the riff raff and in a grateful owner's kitchen in no time, as I was clearly the best specimen on display. My location on top of the pile wouldn't hurt either.

A few people passed me up for inferior specimen, but soon a woman with impeccable taste approached. She picked up half a dozen others, scrutinized them, and returned them to the pile. Then, her velvety hands found me. She turned me over several times, caressed my crimson skin, and placed me in a plastic bag. After finding a couple others of near quality, she placed us ever-so-gently into her basket, where we joined a loaf of bread, a gallon of milk, and some pork chops.

I won't bore you with details of the drive home. Just know it wasn't the gentlest ride, and I was thrilled the bread was there to cushion me.

Once we arrived, I was placed in a bowl on the counter. I knew I was in a fine home with a great appreciation of my kind. After all, I was out there on display, unlike the bread and milk hidden in the refrigerator.

The family seemed nice enough - the woman, a man about her age, and a little boy named Timmy. Each of them glanced my way several times that day. It was nice to be appreciated.

Anyhow, before I knew it, the woman had grabbed me, rinsed me off, and put me in Timmy's lunch box. It was one tight squeeze. A couple slices of bread were there, with some turkey and cheese. Joining us were a juice box and some cookies. I could barely move, and it was so dark I couldn't see anything once the box was closed.

Still, I had high hopes. Timmy, I was sure, would savor every bite of me. He might show me off to his friends, or give me to his teacher. Thinking about the pleasure I would give that boy helped me pass the time until lunch.

As soon as Timmy picked up the lunchbox, I wondered how accurate my assessment really was. He hit that box against the wall at least a dozen times en route to the lunchroom. It's a wonder I wasn't bruised beyond recognition.

My hopes were raised again once we reached the lunchroom. Timmy placed me on the table first, and did I ever have a prime view. I was surrounded by thermoses, sandwiches, grapes, cookies, slices of pizza. The sights practically made my non-existent mouth water.

It was the lunchroom banter that really got me sweating (figuratively, of course). Timmy started asking around. It seemed that he preferred bananas to apples.

I couldn't believe it. How could anyone prefer one of those short mushy yellow things to the wonderful redness of me?

Before I knew it, I experienced utter humiliation. I was tossed into another boy's hands, and Timmy got his banana. Shockingly, it had three bruises. Oh, the shame!

Still, I looked at the boy with skepticism. Would he give me the respect I deserved? Would I give him the eating pleasure I was destined to provide?

As he brought me toward his mouth, I was hopeful. The sparkle in his eye and his tongue movement made me believe he was as excited about our encounter as I was. As his teeth sank into my juicy flesh, I was certain his taste buds were rejoicing.

I couldn't have been more wrong. Within three seconds of that bite, the contents of the boy's mouth were expectorated on the lunchroom table, and I was flung halfway across the room, landing squarely in this trash receptacle, where you find me now.

I've certainly had an entertaining life: for you at least! Next time, I suppose, I shouldn't get my hopes too high. Besides, who knows? I could yet be recycled for horse feed.


Pride goes before destruction, a haughty spirit before a fall. Proverbs 16:18 NIV

note: Malus domestica is the scientific name for an apple


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Pat Guy 05/31/07
Who would have thought to write about an adventure of an apple! A really well done, well written and ... dare I say it ... exciting adventure! I LOVED. LOVED the voice!

Leigh MacKelvey06/01/07
Wow! This was so original and well written.( and sure to get the judges attention!)
I loved the first person of an apple, of all things! I also liked the message, told in a unique manner. ( "my non-existent mouth" cracked me up) Another great job!
dub W06/03/07
How delightful. Personification of an apple (with no mouth, lol). I really enjoyed this.
Jan Ackerson 06/04/07
My dad, who used to own an apple orchard, would love this! Consider printing it up as an illustrated flyer, if there are any orchard-owners nearby who would agree to distribute it. It's wonderful!
Benjamin Graber06/04/07
LOL! This is a cute, creative adventure. I enjoyed this one!
Sara Harricharan 06/04/07
Okay. Creative is the first thing that comes to mind. ROFL is the next. ^_^ This is too fun! I enjoyed the read all the way through and at first thought it was a monkey in the crate until you continued on to the grocery store. I really liked the apple's POV. This is certainly an adventure to be remembered. Great job.
Terry R A Eissfeldt 06/04/07
They may have to start a new adventure section for fruit and veggies in the library after this! But wait Veggie Tales may already be there. So on with the Fruit Adventures! Loved it.
Sharlyn Guthrie06/04/07
I really got a chuckle out of this highly creative adventure! Love the perspective, and you managed to relate it to scripture, too!
Tabiatha Tallent06/04/07
Very imaginative. Loved it!!
Myrna Noyes06/04/07
Very intriguing title that gave me no clue as to the fun piece to follow! :) What a creative story! I don't think I've ever read anything before with an apple as the MC! I'm going to have an apple for lunch, and I will be certain now to treat it with the respect it deserves! :D Great job!
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/04/07
This was delightful. I bet nobody else had an adventure as an apple! You're very creative.
Loren T. Lowery06/04/07
An aplle as the first person MC! What a fun, creative, well-written piece. This apple had spunk, personality galore, a bit of vanity and just enough wisdom to make her entire adventure believable. And, if you can get the reader to suspend reality and believe, then you've done your job as a writer. Well done!
Dee Yoder 06/04/07
Wow, I thought no one else made up stories about inanimate objects having thoughts or coming to life! (While in college, I wrote one about a bottle of fingernail polish escaping to the outside.) And I want to write one about grocery carts...Oh, never mind! Needless to say, I enjoyed this adventure. :)
Catrina Bradley 06/04/07
So very creative and original! A great, and well told, adventure tale.
Betty Castleberry06/05/07
Unique. Original. One-of-a-kind. Fun. I could go on, but you get the idea. I loved your exercise in creativity. It's well written, too. Kudos.
Lynda Lee Schab 06/06/07
Love, love, love it! I suspected what was coming...that dreaded "trade time" in the lunch room but it made me laugh anyway (and loudly, I might add). Brilliant creative voice, nice ending - and a message in there too. Excellent!
Teri Wilson06/06/07
What a suprise treat! When I read your title I thought it was going to be about a domesticated male (i.e. husband). I was way off.

This is super-cute and creative. What is it with you and apples??? ha ha

Love, Teri
Sherrie Jackson06/06/07
It has been nice to read some light-hearted adventures this week (Lord knows mine isn't!). I kept thinking as I was reading, how well constructed your sentences were. I don't know why that struck me, but it did. :-)

So well written, funny, and charming, just an overall pleasure to read. Thanks!
Kristen Hester06/06/07
Very creative and fun!
Jacquelyn Horne06/06/07
Cute story with a great Pov. This was really different!
william price06/07/07
Jo-anne, What agreat story idea, and you pulled it off masterfully. I really, really liked this. Superb. Two Thumbs Up!!!!
God bless.
Val Clark06/08/07
A story with a perfect moral. Loved the POV, which you portrayed very convincingly. Very visual piece. An enjoyable read. yeggy
Pauline TAIT06/09/07
How wonderful how ever did you come up with the idea about a 100 years ago I wrote as a flower for my mock GCSE English exam ty for bringing back the memory
Betsy Markman09/10/08
This is terrific! Well done, my friend!