The Official Writing Challenge
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Well-rhymed. The meter seems to skip a bit, however. The first half is very strong. Great potential here.
Nice poem of a Bible truth. Encouraging to those who need a saviour.
05/26/07
This is beautiful! I stumbled a bit over the stanza that started with Go with Mary but not enough to realize there is no way I could have pulled this off. Well done!
I like this one - there are some really neat lines, especially "As innocent as Eden's dawn", which expresses so well the power of forgiveness.
One thought for critique: some of your rhymes sound a bit forced, you might want to be careful of your rhyme choices.
Keep up the good work!
05/27/07
Wonderful! Beautiful! Great job.
05/29/07
Lovely, touching poem about Mary Magdalene! I especially appreciated the stanzas showing how Jesus dealt with her so tenderly. My favorite one was "His eyes were like deep pools of love,
Unlike the type of love I knew.
Not demanding, taking, grabbing,
But tender as the morning dew." Nice writing! :)