The Official Writing Challenge
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04/27/07
I had a feeling that Sarah's cousin would be the guy next door! This was well written, though I did notice a few punctuation mistakes. Also, when writing the character's thoughts, it may be useful to use italics rather than speech marks.
I enjoyed your story from the title to the end! Well done!
04/28/07
Very good romance story -- fits the genre perfectly. And the title is perfect. Nice job.
04/29/07
What a nice romance here! I enjoyed reading this.
05/01/07
Great foreshadowing of "the cousin" being "the neighbor." I enjoyed reading this story. Nice job. Cheri
05/02/07
You do know how to spin a good romance! Great job!
I like a story that leaves you with a big grin on your face. This did exactly that for me.
Interesting how the things we first reject can become what we end up cherishing most. I guess some might call it kismet. Enjoyed the way you tied everything together using the garden scene and the neighbor.
05/02/07
Good one! It has all the elements of a romance.
05/02/07
Charming piece! It shows how first impressions can change! :) I did suspect that Sarah's cousin Greg would turn out to be Mary's nosy neighbor, but I very much enjoyed the unfolding of this story. Good job!
05/02/07
Cousin=next door neighbor! Very nice. I like how you showed the conflicting emotions in Mary and especially how you wrote it all to such a smooth ending.
Absolutely wonderful story. Good job.
05/02/07
This was really good - you made me feel the same about this guy - I would have retorted back that it was my FRIEND who told me about the mimosa. Hrmph! At least - that's the way I felt and that was good! You spun a really good romantic tale. Kudos girl!
05/03/07
***Congratulations on your Highly Commended!***
05/03/07
Congratulations on a much deserved win!!!
05/03/07
Hey Jacquelyn! Congratulations on being highly commended! Great job! Blessings, Cheri
05/03/07
Very nice! Congrats on your Highly Commended.
05/11/07
I came calling, to thank you for commenting on my "Sparrow" story, and found this delightful entry to read. Congratulations on the "Highly Commended" award, too. Now, I want to know, What happens next?!