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Topic: Shopping (03/01/07)
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TITLE: Shopaholic | Previous Challenge Entry
By Joanne Malley
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ADD TO MY FAVORITES
Comfy shoes and cash in hand
I headed toward the mall,
Clothing, house wares, jewelry too
I plan to buy it all.
Sale signs, red tags, special deals,
All make me salivate,
Bargains, markdowns, bonus buys -
I can no longer wait!
Once inside, I plan to search
Through each and every store,
You can bet I’ve got a plan
To walk through every door.
“Clear a path…I’m on a hunt”
To find the greatest deals,
Sweaters, jackets, dresses too
On rounders with big wheels.
Blenders, baubles, lingerie
They’re sure to catch my eye,
I am hooked on shopping sprees –
A fact I can’t deny.
Lines that wrap around the bend
And hordes of people too,
I don’t care what I will face –
“Watch out…I’m coming through!”
Shopping carts filled to the brim
Lurk near each aisle I pass,
Dangerous enough with wheels
Thank God they have no gas!
“Hey, watch it pal…my ankle’s hurt
I have the right of way,”
“Quiet lady, don’t complain
You have too much to say!”
Hurried people, rudeness too
Why am I such a fool?
Surely it’s the cash I save
That makes me want to drool.
“This is mine, now get away
Go shop way over there!”
“No!…it’s mine, I found it first
Now don’t you start to swear!”
Checkout lines are way too long
I chose the shortest one,
Blistered feet and frazzled nerves
Appear before I’m done.
Clothing, house wares, jewelry too
I found it in a flash,
No more bargains – no more sales
‘Cause I’m all out of cash!
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Great poem, perfect for the topic.
Great job on the mechanics, it flowed well with near perfect metre; nothing to get in the way of enjoying this poem. I'm so glad you are still rhyming. You're one of the best poets here. God bless.
Really, a fun poem to read. Great job.
You do a great job writing poetry, Joanne. Another fantastic read!
Oh, so well you do it!
You kept your meter right in time.
The topic? Stuck right to it!
This was such a funny work
And gave delight to all;
I hope you get the highest mark
For your treatise on the mall.
Seriously, I enjoyed this poem even though I am not a shopaholic.
You make this look so easy, a tremendous job!