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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Shopping (03/01/07)
I wished to buy some happiness
To last me all my days,
But sadness slipped into my heart
And changed my cheerful ways.

I hoped to shop Salvation’s Store
And buy forgiveness there
But found I could not pay the price;
I’d not the funds to bear.

I thought to purchase crown of gold
And robe of purest white,
But I was dressed in filthy rags,
Without a crown in sight.

I planned to pay for sweetest peace
And rest within my soul,
But I had nothing I could give
To reach this lofty goal.

I longed to gain God’s perfect love
Through payment I might make,
But all I did was doomed to fail;
Again I’d made mistake.

I grasped to get eternal life
With riches of my own.
I thought that I could meet the cost,
But it could not be done.

For any fortune that was mine
Was useless to save me.
If I gave everything I had,
I never could be free.


Yet all I sought was possible;
I had not understood.
The One who died upon the cross
Had paid my price for good.
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cindy yarger
03/08/07
Good take on the subject. Great title too as all of us are penniless when it comes to buying the things that really matter! Good job.
Marilyn Schnepp 
03/08/07
So beautifully written and so true! Loved this poet's take on the topic of shopping. It reached down and tugged at my heart strings...and touched my innermost soul. Thank you!
Janice Fitzpatrick
03/09/07
Beautiful flowing poem-so true! I really was touched by this. Nice work! God bless your talent!:0)
Betty Castleberry
03/10/07
Very, very nice. Good meter and rhyme and a great message. Well done.
Joanne Sher 
03/11/07
This flowed beautifully - and had such a wonderful, wonderfully shared, message. Perfect title too. Great job!
Marilee Alvey
03/11/07
Nice rhyme, nice meter, good creativity, good message. It's the total package!
Jacquelyn Horne
03/12/07
Really loved this. Well constructed. What a message!
Sandra Petersen
03/13/07
Amen!

Good rhythm and meter. The best message. Really enjoyed the part about Salvation's Store.
Jan Ackerson
03/13/07
Wonderful, this would make a great cover for a church bulletin!
Catrina Bradley
03/14/07
If only more could understand this simple message you have spelled out so beautifully. Thank you for sharing!
Jen Davis
03/15/07
Great way to apply the topic. I especially liked the 5th stanza, but the entire poem was very nicely done.
Linda Watson Owen
03/18/07
Verna, this is lovely and so perfect for this time of Lent with Easter coming soon! Your rhythm was lilting and true all the way through, and the rhyming was so pleasing. Best of all, the message is the real Heart of the gospel. Amen!