The Official Writing Challenge
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I like your ending--I was wondering where this was all going and wasn't disappointed. Great imagery.
08/27/06
Without the paragaraph spacing - this is difficult to read. Thank you for sharing.
08/28/06
Everything in your story reached completion with your summary message. I like your captivating style of writing, too.

My only suggestion is the final scene at the tree, with the coat, would be more believable if you could indicate this was a dream or allegory rather than a literal event.
08/29/06
Like the idea and the plot, but felt the writing, tho beautiful, was a little too complicated for the simplicity of the story.