The Official Writing Challenge
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04/13/06
GOod poem. One spelling mistake that I spotted (ware for wear) and you might want some quotation marks in the last stanza. But otherwise, I like it a lot
04/14/06
A beautifully written poem with all of the poetic elements: rhyme, rhythm, word choice, message. I think your Confidential Notice at the end detracts from the poem; it's very clever, but the tone is so different from that of the poem that it almost feels like it belongs tacked on to another piece. You're a talented writer!
04/14/06
WARE... As in to ware down...
04/17/06
I love it. This is an excellent poem with a great message.
04/20/06
I think it’s lovely, JesusPuppy; very soothing. Thank you.