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By Brandi Roberts
01/08/06
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Escape, the word lingering on my fingertips
A distant memory, a love lost, or
Sailing to a distant shore

Each expression is my own, none other can tell
What unfolds in this, indicative of
My tale, my labor of love.

Perhaps it is a maiden, with eyes full of fire
Her lover, lost in the darkness of night
She, searching by candlelight

Or it could be humorous, a jest of some kind
A cantankerous cow wearing a crown
Who’s become the king of town

In suspense? Whodunnit? A mysterious call
That makes everyone a suspect, and
A trick or some slight of hand

History bows to the tip of a fertile pen
A war becomes humanized, with hints of
A soldiers thoughts, life, and love

A fantastical ride on a dragon named Crate
With ogres, fairies, a mythical tale
Will see the wicked witch fail.

These adventures and more are what I can create
A feat accomplished with a square-ish shape
And pen, I have found my “escape”.

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01/12/06

Uninspired. Unimaginative. Unappealing. Whatever negative "un" word you can apply to this will follow.

Amy Michelle Wiley

01/13/06

ROFL! Jez, you're nuts!

As for the poem, that was great! I loved it!

Amy Michelle Wiley

01/13/06

Oooo, forgot an un word. ;-) Unique! I liked the form and you rhymed words togther I wouldn't have thought of. :-) Great job!

Lynda Lee Schab

01/13/06

UNcommon. UNbelievably clever. UNmistakeably great. UNderstand??
What writer can't relate? Well done!
Blessings, Lynda

Alexandra Wilkin

01/13/06

This is wonderful - I was entirely lost in it, and the images it created in my mind - from start to finish. The heart of a writer, beautifully spoken. Lovely: and now I am going to back and read it again. (My nana always said, you can please some of the people some of the time, but not all of the people all of the time. So if someone does not like it, dont worry!) God bless.

01/15/06

Jez, I thought this was great! The basic idea is quite simple, and yet you've dressed it with such intriguing and melodious words, we can't help but be caught up in it. The only flaw: 'soldiers' in the 3rd last paragraph needs an apostrophe. Great job, dearie. Hold your head high!

Marilyn Schnepp

01/16/06

Congrats for coming into the Top Runnings! I really liked this poem, and now I feel honored and humbled that you stopped by and read my Un-incidental, Un-exciting, Un-inspiring Challenge! (smile) Kudos to you for great poetic masterpiece!!

Alexandra Wilkin

01/16/06

When I read your critique Jez, before I knew you had written this, I thought: blimey! Ol' Jez is being unreasonable harsh - and you were, on yourself! This was lovely stuff Jez. And this is just a taster of what you can do when you let your imagination have a little freedom. God bless honey, and congrats!

Shari Armstrong

01/17/06

Jez -HUSH!!! lol - if I'd read this earlier I would have known it was you -because you'd only been that mean to yourself LOL

01/17/06

Oh Jez - you're too hard on yourself. I loved it :)

01/18/06

Oh, com'on... hon! You know it's good. :)
You've captured the essence of the imagination.
LOOOOVE it.