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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Key (02/14/13)
In the corner of the dining room, stood my grandmother's china closet. It was filled with plates, cups, glasses and other miscellaneous items. In the bottom drawer was my favorite item, a stereoscope with cards of places throughout the world. The stereoscope was an instrument with two eyepieces used to impart a three-dimensional effect to two photographs of the same scene taken at different angles. Because I was a little child, the closet remained locked and I was allowed only to view the items in the presence of adults.

When I reached the age of 12, I was given the key to open the china closet. I touched the plates, cups, glasses and other items. I enjoyed the feel of a delicate and beautiful, floral sugar and creamer set. It wasn't long before my fingers opened the bottom drawer and grabbed the stereoscope and cards. Now I propelled myself to the Taj Mahal, watched bananas picked in Cuba, sailed down the Danube, toured the Windsor Castle, and enjoyed the windmills in Amsterdam. My favorite scene was a lady sitting on top of a rock in the Alps. It made me gasped as she appeared to totter on the rock. What I really wanted to know was how she climbed to the top in a dress?

My grandmother died and the china closet was sold. Today, I still have the sugar and creamer set along with the stereoscope and cards. My world was enriched from the treasures of the china closet. Even if my world was viewed in black and white, I had a wonderful journey every time I slid a card through the stereoscope and traveled to unknown magical places.
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Judith Gayle Smith-Owens Vitouswykegardinerclark
02/24/13
Takes me back to my Gram. Lovely story.
C D Swanson 
02/24/13
Awwww...thank you for the memories. It will touch many like myself who will recall their younger days and "grandmothers"

God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
02/27/13
I totally enjoyed this piece. I felt like you took me on a journey back through time. I could see the MC eager to have that key to peruse the china cabinet at leisure.

My main suggestion would be try to avoid the passive sentences with words like was. For example this sentence: In the bottom drawer was my favorite item,
could be made active like this: The bottom drawer cradled my favorite item.

I think you covered the topic in a fresh and fascinating way. the fact that you still treasure those items really says a lot and I think most of us can relate to things like that. Good job.
Alicia Renkema
02/28/13
Even as an adult I love going to my mom's (she still doesn't really like me going through her stuff) and opening her china cabinet by turning that key. Keys are fascinating things and unlock so many wonderful mysteries (even if small) and world's of joy. I loved how you talked about the stereoscope and all you could view with it. I didn't know that was what it was called though so this was an educational piece for me as well. Thanks for sharing your memories with such lovely detail. Blessings...