The Official Writing Challenge
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08/09/12
This was a wonderful entry with a powerful message. I liked the story, and the interaction of the two friends. Nicely done.

God bless~
I really enjoyed this sweet story. You managed to convey the deep love they had with God and their love to each other. A lot of things are easier if one has a buddy.

Be careful with the quotation marks. If you don't put one at the end of the paragraph it means the same person is speaking. I did have trouble following who was speaking.

You did a nice job with this. You covered the topic in a sweet way. I really liked those characters. They seemed real and left me with a feel good feeling.
08/12/12
The friends have obviously matured together and love the Lord. Good story and a good message. Thanks.
08/13/12
Food for thought! A wonderful story with a good lesson on gluttony as well. Very well written!