The Official Writing Challenge
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01/17/05
Bravo
I love how you said it all in the words of this poem.
Blessings
Yashua Bless
This is very good. I love the imagery used.

I do think there are some little things that should be polished to make it stronger. Ex. He makes us "breathe" not "breath". Who makes you(r heart) skip a beat. I also think it would look better to spell out "and" rather than use "&" and numbers.

All in all, these are little things. The content of your poem was wonderful, I'd just like to see it finessed.
thank you all for your comments it is much appreciated. God Bless
God truly is the first and the last. Thank you for sharing this. God bless you.
01/23/05
excellent poem