The Official Writing Challenge
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06/02/06
Isn't it sad that so many people in nursing homes are never visited. Thanks for sharing something most of us probably fear - being alone with no visitors.
Sad story. I enjoyed reading your description, but was unsure about the subject? Was is not having a purpose?
06/05/06
If we're talking "Purpose in Life" of the day nurse...she is doing her best to make Muriel comfy. However, if we're talking Muriel's purpose in life - that's another story. Waiting for another Sunday...or the next Sunday. How sad, but true! Nice job of keeping the Reader's interest throughout.
06/07/06
You had some very good descriptive phrases here-"thin white hands clasping its arms like the talons of a hawk," "A pearl studded comb holds thin strands of white hair off her face." The story is very sad but too true. I wondered as well about whose purpose you writing about, but it's a good story.
06/07/06
A heart breaking story :( (watch the spacing between paragraphs). Great details and descriptions.