The Official Writing Challenge
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05/12/06
A lot of good here, keep working and this story will smooth out. Thanks for posting.
05/12/06
Thanks for sharing this heartfelt story. Good job.
I really liked the fact that you wrote about such a timly event. You really took me to Iraq with your descriptions and imagery. Nice work. Like Dub said, a few problems. You switched tenses a few times and that made it difficult to follow, but a good message with a good plot. Great work!