The Official Writing Challenge
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01/30/06
Such a beautiful way to express space! No!..An awesome way! My only suggestion is: I thought it ended beautifully WITHOUT the last line about the feast. (only just my opinion) But I loved it! Beautifully done! Well written and Kudos!
02/03/06
Beautifully done.
I love the first and last verses. I agree that you don,t need the last line. The second verse needs some help I think.