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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Escape (01/02/06)

TITLE: The Grape Escape
By Shari Armstrong
01/07/06


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“Did he go back inside?” my friend asked.

I looked quickly, “I think so.”

He looked around the other corner of the garage. “Nobody over there, either.”

We looked up at the vines growing along the front of the garage roof. I could almost taste the grapes. We’d been waiting patiently for the old man to go back inside so we could reach the sweet harvest.

My friend started to climb up the side of the garage.

“Door!” I warned.

Amazing! My friend managed to scoot around the corner and still hold on without falling.

The wife came outside. I tried to squeeze up against the wall and held my breath. I hoped she wouldn’t see me.

I peeked and saw her get a couple tomatoes off the plants in their little garden. She went back inside, not even looking our way.

“Come on,” he said through a squished grape.

I scampered up to join him. I grabbed the nearest grape and stuffed it in my mouth. Juice dripped out of the corner of my mouth, but I didn’t care. I balanced myself and got another one.

Something swished past my head. The old man was swinging a broom. My friend had already disappeared. I dropped and escaped to the next yard and hide behind the big tree.

“Marie,” the old man turned to his wife, “I don’t know why we bother to keep those old vines. The squirrels always get more of them than we do.”


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Jeanne E Webster 01/09/06
Enjoyed the humor here! Thanks!
Marilyn Schnepp 01/09/06
Ditto! I agree. It was a Great relief from some tedius reading. Thanks! I loved it and especially the Title!
Rachel Burkum01/10/06
Haha! I enjoyed this very much. Nice ending - didn't even see it coming.
Needs a little polish here and there, but otherwise, well written. Good job!
Jeffrey Snell01/12/06
Very cute! Pretty tricky--you had me fooled! =) Thanks for the fun.
Alexandra Wilkin01/12/06
Really nice read; fun, relaxed, and a cute little 'twist in the tail(!)'. God bless.
terri tiffany01/12/06
It was very cute!! Nice and light and very real!
Jan Ackerson 01/12/06
Very cute! I love a good pun, and this was adorable.
Cassie Memmer01/12/06
Cute and fun read! I could just see those little boys! LOL! Fooled me! :o)
Pat Guy 01/12/06
I wondered how one grape could cause that much trouble! A great and fun read!
Debbie Sickler01/13/06
Would have liked it a little longer and maybe a name for the friend, but this was very cute. Great idea!
Linda Watson Owen01/13/06
A pure delight!! LOL
Lynda Lee Schab 01/13/06
Great POV! This was fun. Great job!
Blessings, Lynda
Val Clark01/14/06
A fun read. Liked the twist at the end. Thanks for making me smile. Yeggy
Sandra Petersen 01/14/06
Good job! I thought we had a case of two juvenile delinquents, and you were thinking squirrels! ROFL! They can be bandits at the bird feeders, but I didn't know they ate grapes(?)
I guess I should have wondered when you had one of them clamber up the side of the garage.
A couple of technicals: "I looked quickly, 'I think so.'" is not quite right. "I looked quickly" is an action and should not have a comma leading to what was said. Much better to supply a period after 'quickly' and then insert 'I told him' or 'I said' or 'answered' either before or after the quotation. "a couple tomatoes" should have 'of' between 'couple' and 'tomatoes'. One typo: "hide behind the big tree", and I know you meant "hid behind".
I will look at the squirrels that frequent our feeders with a little more appreciation for their cleverness from now on! Thanks!
Anita Neuman01/14/06
Well, Sandra caught those typos for you, so there's nothing left for me to say except to offer kudos on a very enjoyable story with a surprise ending. What a fun read!