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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Expect (07/11/13)
A Dream
I expect I won’t win the prize for this short essay. I never win anything so why should I expect anything to be different with this. In fact, I am not good at anything else either. I guess I am just a failure. And another thing, I don’t know why people say I have a bad attitude about things. Bad things are always happening to me all the time. There isn’t one day that goes by that something bad doesn’t happen. I expect to see myself on the morning news being carried to the local hospital because of some accident. I see people getting hurt and in the news all the time so why shouldn’t it be me. I am no different than all those other people that have bad things happen to them. Why shouldn’t I expect it?
Riiinnnnng, Riiinnnnng, Riiinnnng.
OH, Uh Oh. Sorry, God, for sleeping past the first ring of the alarm on the clock. I expect I was sleeping real tight or still in some far out dream. I don’t really know. Anyway I expect this to be another great day with you. Forgive me, though, about my attitude I had yesterday. As I think about it now, it was lousy. Today, I expect things to go better with me at work. I am thankful for my boss and the words he had with me. He thinks I will make the grade and he expects that when an opportunity opens, I will be among those picked for a possible promotion. It’s great to look forward to something like that even if it never comes to pass. Life is always worth the living and expecting the best always brings out one’s best. As I heard my Mom say to me around Christmas time, “Anticipating something is just about as enjoyable as actually seeing it come to pass.
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Colin Swann
07/20/13
Cute neat entry. Enoyable! Glad your main character had a chang of heart. LOL
Glynis Becker
07/21/13
I like the way you've taken on the topic in two different ways. A beautiful reminder that we need to be ready to have a good expectation of what the Lord will do in and through us. Great job!
Genia Gilbert
07/22/13
Good contrasts to address the topic very well! God has to adjust my "expecting" attitude quite often. Good writing.
C D Swanson 
07/23/13
This short entry was packed with a powerful message that most will be ablet to identify with. That's a sign of a good read, when the audience can identify with the MC. Very well done.

Thanks. God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
07/23/13
Hmm this is definitely different in a good sort of way. You had my heart hurting for the MC in the opening paragraph. Life at times can be what we make of it.

Be careful about mentioning the contest since the top ten overall pieces are selected to be in an anthology where the reader may not know about the challenge. However, you were vague about the contest so I think it'll work fine.


I enjoyed the juxtaposition. Our attitude can make a huge difference. I suspect that there are many people out there who can relate--maybe a bit too much! :)
Judith Gayle Smith-Owens Vitouswykegardinerclark
07/28/13
Delightful. Emotionally identifiable . . .
Judith Gayle Smith-Owens Vitouswykegardinerclark
07/28/13
Almost forgot - I understand your MC's frazzled state of mind and see the lack of sentence structure and paragraphing as a visual aid to your mood.

A wee bit of ink from someone who briefly worked as a teacher's aide and hesitates to comment:

White spaces for the second paragraph would make me, the reader, feel your delight, your wonderful mood change from the previous day.

Just a humble thought from a fan. I appreciate your critiques.