The Official Writing Challenge
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05/05/13
What a delightful family story. You made it clear and understandable. The drip was a cute way to cover the topic.

Thanks for sharing.
I love this story. Oh how I could relate to the MC. I can remember hiding a kitten or three in my childhood as well. You really did a nice job of making the story seem real while I enjoyed a good giggle imaging the kitten dripping on Grandpa!

My only suggestion would be to focus more on just the kitten. The other stories were good too, but I would have loved to see more about the kitten, how you found it, prevented it from meowing and how Grandpa came to love it. It's hard when telling true stories to know what to include, but I've learned with such limited word space it's better to focus on one memory and really pull the reader into the story.

You did a great job though and I look forward to more interesting tails (I couldn't help it) like these. Good job!