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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Time (11/15/12)
Three of my friends and myself

decided to take a leisurely canoe ride

down the French Broad. The

morning was warm with summer sun and a

gentle breeze rustle our hair. The

canoe instructor told us to keep our

life jackets on at all times,

explained rowing techniques, and to

head for shore and put the canoe over

us if lightning occurred.

After getting into the canoe, we

struggled for a few minutes with

paddling. Occasionally we went left

when we should have been going right

and right when we should have been

going left. Once we drove the canoe

upon some rocks and had to hop out and

shove the canoe into the water again.

Finally, we smoothed out our ride and

enjoyed the serenity of the French

Broad. The blue sky danced with white,

puffy clouds. Along the river bank, a

blue heron stood like a stealthily

statute fishing for his lunch.

Nearby, a deer jumped out the bushes

with its white tail flagging hello to

us.

We were about three miles down

the river when we noticed the sky

darkened. Soon clap,clap, boom, boom

cut the air. In between the claps and

booms, lightning bolts flashed. The

water was the last place we wanted to

be. Furiously, we paddled harder to

outrun the storm. More lightning

flashed about us. We saw a small

cove away from trees. We paddled the

canoe into it. We darted out of

the canoe and flipped it over. Four

scared paddlers huddled under it. All

around us, thunder and lightning

crashed. Rain pelted down. We

encouraged each other with Scripture

and prayer.

Finally, the storm abated. We

jumped into the canoe and paddled four

more miles to our landing. We were

thankful we had taken time to listen

to our instructor. Although still

shaken by our experience, we had had

fun, learned how to endure a storm in

a canoe, and vowed we would do it all

again next summer! Hopefully, the

next trip would be truly on a clear

day!
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Christina Banks
11/23/12
Very interesting piece about canoeing. A little formatting would help make it easier to read.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
11/24/12
This is great, I could almost feel the spray of the river on my face. Though I'll admit that once the instructor said to hide under the canoe I'd have been out of there! I did notice a couple of tiny things--you used rustle instead of rustled and I'm not sure if drive is the right word for canoe. I'd have suggested paddled but near the end you used that word quite a bit. Maybe the word directed would have been better, or even steered or floated but in actuality it is no biggie. I think you told a delightful story. The ending was great with just the right amount of suspense. I could feel the lightning crackle through the air. It left me with a smile.
C D Swanson 
11/27/12
Great job! Loved it. Thanks.
God bless~