The Official Writing Challenge
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10/25/12
I truly enjoyed this well written story. The MC had depth, and your words brought me to the scene.

Nicely done. God Bless~
10/27/12
I really liked this....it reminded me of my waitressing days when the guys really did keep me hopping with their coffee cups.
Very well written and a joy to read!

God BLess
10/27/12
This is cute.

One minor mistake I noticed:
"Christine sat down a moment to catch her breath, when Sam demanded, yet, another refill."
You don't need the commas after "demanded" or "yet."

I loved the ending. Nice job.
10/28/12
Great story. It gave me a picture of what it might be like to be a waitress. A cute ending.

God Bless!
I really enjoyed this. You had me smiling throughout and I instantly liked the MC. You did a great job with the dialog and the ending was a hoot. You also did a nice job of writing on topic yet still having a fresh approach.
10/31/12
Hee-hee! Loved that ending! :) I really enjoyed this story, and the cafe full of interesting characters! Good job!
11/01/12
I enjoyed your story. It was humorous and the ending was a good one. Workplace harrassment or good natured fun - I think, the latter!