The Official Writing Challenge
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02/17/11
Delightful read! So "true to life." Great Scripture reference.
I'm not a good judge of poetry but this seems quite clever to me.
02/19/11
Wonderfully done! I love the progression of the story, the rhythm and flow is fabulous and I enjoyed it very much!
I love how the God reminds him throughout the days of the verse he read on Sunday, and that he tries to follow it no matter what. The meter could be a little tighter, but I truly enjoyed what you had to say through your poetry.
02/20/11
This really was clever. Isn't it amazing how we can get so fired up and try so hard, only to blow it? Bu5 then to recoop - what a sweet victory! I loved the happy ending.
Excellent - a great poem with a great lesson.
I really liked this modern fairy tale- like rhyme.You did a great job with this. It was a pleasure to read.
What an amazing read. Your poem flowed like a mighty river. Great job. Keep writing.
loved the imagery presented with excellent meter and flow.
You did very well and I loved the read.
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Congratulations for placing 8th in level 2.