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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Bon Voyage (09/05/05)

TITLE: Pleasing the Father
By Shirley Thomas


I know I have to go, Dad, but I sure am going to miss you. Im going to miss my home. I know I have a job to accomplish, but its still hard to leave this place. I know its part of the plan and Ive know about it a long time, but

I know my Son; Ill miss you, too. But it is a job no one but You can do. Ive tried everything else and as You know, everyone else has failed. You are the only one that can accomplish this life changing event. We made this plan together long before the establishment of the very place you are about to visit. Just remember, Son, its just a visit; I wont leave You there. Youll be back by my side and by that time You will have accomplished what no one else will ever be able to do.

Well Dad, I guess its time to go. Ill do whatever You tell me and Ill say what You tell me. Everyone will know that my Father sent me. I want to please You, Father.

The Father hugged the Son and looked at Him with love and compassion in His eyes. He would miss His Son, but He knew for this short period of time, He had to let Him go.He had a job to do. There was a great adoption about to take place. Many children would come to this beautiful home He shared with His Son. The Father was so excited, yet He knew He was going to miss His Son, His beautiful Son, His only Son.

The Son hung on to His Father as long as He could. He knew He had to let go and leave His home, a home that was full of peace and joy. He would miss that, because He knew where He was going was just the opposite. His job was to bring peace and joy to this place called earth. A place that had once been full of the same peace and joy, but was now void of it. Their greatest creation, man, had given all that away and He had to go there to get it back, to restore what had been taken. It was going to be costly and He knew the price He was going to pay. But it had to be done, there was no other choice. In order for the plan to be complete He had to leave His home and His Father.

Are you ready, My Son?

Yes, I am Dad. Actually, Im excited because I know well finally have the family we want so much.

They exchanged one last hug and smiled knowingly in each others eyes.

Bon Voyage My Son. Ill be with You

Bon Voyage Father, see You soon

The Father was pleased.

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Phyllis Inniss09/12/05
He sent His begotten Son with whom He is well pleased. Good entry to mark Jesus' entry to earth.
Daniel Owino Ogweno09/13/05
It's not difficult to capture the emotions that usually accompany such departures. You were able to picture the moment and the emotion that characterised Christ journey to earth to redeem us. Good entry!
Jan Ackerson 09/13/05
The only suggestion I have is a few commans in the last few exchanges of dialog: "Bon Voyage, Father" and "Bon Voyage, my Son." Great, creative idea for this topic!
Jan Ackerson 09/13/05
Yikes, I meant "commas."
B Brenton09/13/05
There is an article almost exactally the same in the Beginner category and personally, I think theirs is better. But good idea and keep at it! God bless.
Shannon Redmon09/17/05
After reading the first paragraph, I knew what this story was about. Good writing skills though!