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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Sightseeing (08/08/05)

TITLE: A Perfect Pallet
By Shari Armstrong


I take my time as I wander through the garden looking at all the sights, not in any hurry. Thereíll be time for rushing later. Each flower created lovingly for me to enjoy. God shaped each perfect petal, each green leaf. As I go from bud to bud, each has a unique smell and texture. The variety is amazing. Smooth edges here, ragged edges there. Yellows, reds, greens, pinks of every shade and they donít clash. A perfect pallet.

Seeing the sight of all this beauty is sometimes overwhelming. I can feel the sun warm on my back. I'm getting sleepy. I look around searching for the perfect place to rest. There, that tree. I settle in, wrapping myself up in peace and drift off to the scent of the nearby roses.

Itís dark! I canít move! Whatís happening? I push and struggle against the bonds holding me, praying to be able to see the warm sun again. I turn my head. There, thatís better! I can see some light peeking through. I can finally move. One more push and I shake free from my prison.

Looking around, the flowers have changed. They are fuller, taller. Itís warmer, too. I stretch again and decide to look at the rest of the garden. There is still so much more to see before nightfall. I move quickly through the garden, to make the most of the light that is left. The colors blend together in a tapestry.

ďLook, Momma! A butterfly!Ē

ďHumble yourselves in the sight of the Lord, and he shall lift you up.Ē James 4:10 KJV

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Phyllis Inniss 08/16/05
Lynda Lee Schab 08/19/05
I thought this was a very creative approach to "sightseeing." Though a short piece, you did a good job descirbing both the caterpillar's and butterfly's view. One small thing that caught my eye was this sentence: "Seeing the sight of all this beauty" - it probably should read, "The sight of all this beauty," (leaving out the "seeing") No big deal, just something that jumped out at me.
Blessings, Lynda
Debra Brand08/19/05
Very good imagery. The pallet that you used should be the artist's 'palette', I think.
Jan Ackerson 08/19/05
I never, ever would have thought of using the POV of a caterpillar/butterfly. Very original.
Amy Michelle Wiley 08/19/05
Very creative! I gave a little internal gasp when I figured out the cocoon (I even figured it out before you told me! hehe). :-) I liked it!
Tammy Johnson08/20/05
Great descriptions and very fun point of view!
Crista Darr08/20/05
You described your sightseeing beautifully, but I didn't "get it" until I read the comments. Now I see!! I would like to see you expand on the butterfly - maybe have it stretch its WINGS and fly so we slow folk could have a better chance of understanding:)
Tisha Martin08/20/05
This is a very good out-of-the box viewpoint of "Sightseeing." I liked it. Wonderful imagery and descriptions.
Debbie OConnor08/22/05
Very creative! Shari, I love it. I agree with Lynda about the sight line (that jumped out at me too), but overall this is great fun and very original. I also agree with Crista that you could do more with it. More would be better, but a great start!
Suzanne R08/25/05
Ditto to all the above - what a great concept. Good job!