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Topic: Hard and Soft (04/23/09)
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TITLE: Feeling Syntax | Previous Challenge Entry
By Samuel Connelly
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ADD TO MY FAVORITES
like liquid oxygen dancing on tongues,
syntax- formulated, constructed, with purpose,
and the heart and soul feels it upon reception
When I was a child I found sentences, like solid
cast-iron skillets slamming my body to the ground
to be pressed upon under so many granite nouns,
afraid of the verbs which brought them crashing down
When I was a young man I discovered silk, and
cotton, and fluffy words, which I hugged tightly
when I slept, for hope that they might fight off the
vicious congregation of dark adverbs, and pronouns
Feeling is expressed upon the tongue, created in the
depths of the soul, and gushes out from the broken
dam of coffee stained teeth. They are all words, all
letters; some are angry, some sweet, some hot, and cold
Sticks and stones have broken bones, but these literary
scars will never leave me. And with each opening of this
cavern to my soul, I must choose to give the hearer phrases
to cuddle with at night, or, a reason to sleep with the light on
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Great poem, great message, great way to expressing the 'feeling syntax' effect.
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Again, well done. :-)
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