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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "A Man is Known by the Company He Keeps" (without using the actual phrase). (01/31/08)

TITLE: OVER EXPOSURE
By Arnost Vevoda
02/07/08


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Father, father in his lair
Facing negatives in dank air.
Mustnít be exposed to the light!
Capturing frames of siblings was dad's delight.

Father, father open that door.
We are your offshoots we deplore!
Let a flash of light ignite your life;
We need your exposure even more.

Father, father - invite the light within,
Without your guidance, we can't win.
Bother father, has his kin developed?
Please place those pictures securely enveloped.

Father, father, further do I implore!
Be that wedge on the edge of that door.
We take heed to your compulsion,
To let light in was your revulsion.

Father, father peer into a trying teen,
Once out grown may never know self - esteem.

Finally mother cast him out in fright,
Forgotten and forsaken - took flight out of sight.

Father never bothered to unhinge that room,
Where darkness dwelt - as one entombed.

Father, father in your dying bed,
I firmly believe - by a guiding light -
Were securely led.

... Now I'm with family,
Rather engaged with my paper-mate poetry,
Daunting relatives to haunt unheeding lives.

Pressed on to those eerie, sterile eyes.


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Jan Ackerson 02/07/08
Very sad story--brings to mind Harry Chapin's "Cat's in the Cradle."

I didn't get a connection to the proverb, though.

I like the structure of this poem, and the effective use of repetition.
Marilyn Schnepp 02/09/08
Very unique, and definitely written by a deep thinker. Perhaps too deep for me to give an accurate assessment or critique...as to how it pertains to our topic; but you have talent - keep writing.
Patty Wysong02/09/08
A fun play on words for the photographer--a Deep play on words for the photographer. I think we can all do the same thing, whatever our 'vice'. I didn't see a connection to the topic, but I think/hope I caught the meaning in the poem. :-)
c clemons02/13/08
Much to deep for me. Keep writing.