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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “A Bird in the Hand is Worth Two in the Bush” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/10/08)

TITLE: Captain Skid
By Arnost Vevoda
01/14/08


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There once was a man known as Mr. Tie-Tan Nick
Of whom was typically in a panic.
Deserting his home and family,
For further ventures and adventures.
Hopes his tell-tale barometer would not hit rage,
As a man of stock - couldn't cramp into a cage.

Still chasing a dream of a hole in one,
Leaving nothing in life to be undone.
However his spouse and children - becoming strangers.
As silhouettes emerge as a lone ranger.

Home coming to an irate wife;
Questioned, "Who's to blame for this domestic strife?"
To the bar unclocked - primed to get schlocked,
Returns home to perceive the hatch - well-locked.

She's being unreasonable he thinks,
That all calls for another drink.
"Observe all I've given my kin,
Bought a house and all within.
Perhaps I'll relocate to enjoy my gin!"

Disappearing for days his mate spells d-i-v-o-r-c-e,
As his mistress discovers gold-digging on course.
His 'ex' currently keeps her house in splendour,
But new girlfriend culminates - big spender.

Now bankrupt - loses his job for distasteful reasons.
Has just hit ice - berg in season.
"Women, women he cries!
Another rye on the rocks will be my demise".

To dreamland crashed this ill fated ship,
Of the former hulk of Mr. Tie-Tan Nick.

May you take a tip from this icy dip?
Though in the temporal all may seem hip.


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Beckie Stewart01/17/08
Very sad what bad choices can mean in life and what you will lose.
Joanne Sher 01/18/08
Clever - a great cautionary tale. Enjoyed this.
Sally Hanan01/21/08
You picked a good title for this one. It would have been an easier read if you had the same number of lines in each stanza and the same number of syllables in each line. The other thing about rhyming is that one has to try and rhyme the words based on which syllable of the precious line is accented, so drawing would have to rhyme with boring etc.
Sara Harricharan 01/22/08
I can't help calling this cute, it just seems so witty and neat. The flow didn't quite read as easily as the meaning of the story. Your message came across clear, but in places like the line with the ice-berg, it reads a little awkwardly? Just my thought-otherwise, good stuff! ^_^