The Official Writing Challenge
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10/25/07
WOW. This is absolutely amazingly descriptive and engaging and wonderful. This is masters' quality. I hope it does well!
10/25/07
Awesome, awesome story. I love your personification of the sun in the 4th paragraph...and just about everything else about this wonderful story.
10/26/07
Wonderful writing! I was a little confused toward the end, but a great story and a nice job.
10/26/07
Beautifully written. You won't be in itermediate for long.
10/27/07
I love the conversation with the tree and this lovely line: "And in that desiccated moment Amanda understood …". Well done.
10/28/07
The first few paragraphs were overly descriptive and overdone in places. I am not a fan of objects being given pronouns. The story came alive with the conversation between Amanda and Jessie. Overall good job.
Thanks for such a clear picture of Amanda's despair and then of her salvation.