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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Calm (emotionally) (09/13/07)

TITLE: Disappointments of Life
By Barbara Peterson
09/15/07


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Disappointments of Life
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Droughts of spring water are left unattended
Issues of life of a diligent heart end up as a pond bended.
Strikes of punishment for a righteous and princes for equity
Ability recedes to a necessity.
Peace yielding fruit gently
Purposely meant
Operations work through Faith of God.
Idols cause griefs and trembling blind devotion façade.
Nature cares for each individual state
The time for attending gate.
Memory leans for mourning and lament
Emotions are emboldened meant.
Notes nothing in secret
Time for what is to be
Spares the Poor and Needy as they seek.

Often mountains are hard to climb
Facts that have a tendency as to grind.
Lessons for learning
In escape of burning
Fear of flames.
Eternally -nails pinning Jesus with pain
Due to our disassociation with Jesus’ Reign.

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Deliverance daily continually shines on objects of desire.
Observe or abstain from occupied offenses with no buyer.
Labor on lacks; lay down the lameness onto the LAMB


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Jan Ackerson 09/23/07
I certainly appreciate that you worked hard on this acrostic...

...but I had a really hard time following what point you were trying to make. Maybe just a tad too abstract and disjointed.

Your vocabulary is rich, and your imagery strong--work on making your poetry more accessible to your readers, perhaps?
Sheri Gordon09/23/07
I agree with Jan -- this is rather complicated and hard to follow. You obviously have some very inspired ideas to share -- try to tighten it up a bit so it's easier for the average reader to grasp. Keep writing -- you have a talent with words.