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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Surprised (09/06/07)
“Sir…sir I think we need to rethink this.”

“Nonsense boy… where’s yore faith!”

“It left… with the scouts… last night.”

“Scouts? Scouts left? Last night?”

“Yes sir! Last night, late.”

“Heck boy, I don’t need no scouts, mount up. I’ll take care of them when I see them again.”

“I’m afraid we’ll see them sooner than you think sir. Sir?”

“What is it boy?”

“Sir, just in case… been a pleasure, a pure pleasure ridin’ with you and all. I never met a man like you before. You ride like yore some kinda god or something. I wish I was as sure of this as you!”

“Heck boy… didn’t no one tell you? I am a god! I ride the wind like you ride a horse!
Fearless… and don’t you forget it. Now mount up! We got work to do, and I don’t want to be late, the element of surprise is on our side boy. Surprise yep surprise! That’s how I get ‘em. We’ll move through that camp like a whirlwind, they won’t know what hit ‘em. No sir they won’t know what hit ‘em. You got that boy!”

“Yes sir!! You sure make me feel good about this sir. This will be a day I always remember! Ridin’ the wind with General Armstrong Custer!”
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Jan Ackerson
09/16/07
Oh, wow, talk about irony. Good job.
Delores Baber
09/18/07
I liked your approach. Sometimes we mortals get too cocky about what we can do and forget that if we win or lose, rise or fall, it is God who soveignly rules in the affairs of men.
I hope America doesn't make the same mistake again in thinking we are invincible.
We might be headed for another surprise. God blesses the humble but pride goes before a fall.

I liked the irony that you described. Dead men riding.

Dee Yoder
09/19/07
You sure accomplished a lot with few words! If ever there was a point in history where a man should have given his plan another think through, it was this one! Surprise was certainly a part of the plan, but not quite the way he expected, obviously! I love the other comment about "dead men riding". Never was a truer phrase spoken! Unique and clever story.