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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Bold (emotionally) (08/30/07)
She gathered her three young, precious children under her arms, as she made her way through the concetration camp.The soldiers could be any where she thought;but she had to go on; knowing that a basket awaited her; so she could feed her children.There were rumours going around in this little town about a young polish lady,who had arrived over three years ago with her young children;Adam,Tony and little Mary, that she was planning an escape from the concentration camp, in which she and her children were being held captive. Yes, her precious children were by her side quietly waiting in the night for a secret meeting that was previously planned.”Oh mama,” said Adam.” “ I hear a sound in the distance. Could this be the lady that is suppose to meet us ?” There were sounds of wolves howling in the distance under the cloud covered full moon; which brought shivers to Maria’s and her childrens’ hearts. “Yes, Adam tonight we shall receive a long waited miracle from God;for that is what I have been
praying for dear children.”

A shadowy figure approached her and to her surprise it was a young Austrian teenage boy. “Here Maria,this is from my Mom ;you will find all that you need in this basket; food, milk and passports for you and for your children.” Maria looked up to heaven and had tears in her eyes. “Thank You God for this food and for this miracle that You have sent our way.”

It was three years ago that Maria, her husband and their
young children were enjoying a relaxing day on their family farm; when the German soldiers came and tore apart their house and forcibly sent them to separate prison camps.Three long years!That is
how long Maria and her children were separated from her husband; and three long years that she endured the cruelty of the soldiers from day to day.

Maria gave the young teenage boy a big hug and said “God Bless you and your mother Sarah”. Maria with tears in her eyes and her heart filled with gratitude waved good bye to the young lad,as he secretly found his way out of
the concetration camp.

Morning arrived; and it was time for row call; and every political prisoner leaped out of their beds in fear of the guards; and quickly arrived at
the mess hall for their porridge and bread. Maria sat at a table with her children and placed little Mary on her lap. Then suddenly an up roar arose, as they were eating. Apparently,one of the women prisoners had stolen something from the kitchen and the guard was threatening to shoot her.She had taken some much needed milk for her baby. Maria knew this women;and she realized that this was her dear friend from her home town in Poland.Horrified,Maria closed her tear filled eyes and prayed, “Dear God; what can I do? They will shoot her!” After placing Mary carefully on the chair next to her ,she asked her oldest son, Adam, to watch Tony and his little sister. Maria arose with her body trembling ,as she went and stood in front of her dear friend; and started to sing the Our Father in her Polish language. Soon the whole room was filled with the echoing of that beautiful song from all the different languages of the prisoners; and then one of the German soldiers, who was standing next to the soldier with drawn out gun, started to sing "The Our Father" in His German tongue as well, with his eyes filled with tears, he lowered the other soldier’s gun.


That was the last time that Maria ever saw her dear friend and that camp; because she and her three children were safely and secretly escorted that night to freedom by that very same young soldier who sang "The Our Father"!
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Jan Ackerson
09/08/07
Wow, this is certainly right on topic for "bold!" You've created a wonderful character in your Maria.

One thing that detracted from the reading experience of this powerful story was the number of errors in punctuation and word choice. You might consider brushing up on some of those picky writing skills.

I'm always moved by stories of courage in the camps. Thank you for sharing this one.
c clemons
09/09/07
Very moving story. I too was put off by the use of so many semi-colons, I realized that Faithwriters have members from all over the world so maybe that is acceptable where you are from. Keep writing.
Dee Yoder
09/11/07
Though the horrors of the camps are the topics of the most vivid stories we hear about, the courageous acts that went on in them were there for the telling, also. Thanks for giving me a story from that terrible time that is the epitome of boldness!
Joanne Sher 
09/14/07
Congratulations, Dee. Your entry has placed 9th in Level 2. The Lists for the Top 15 in each Level and the Top 40 overall is available in the Weekly Results and Highest Rankings forum of our Faithwriters Message Boards