The Official Writing Challenge
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09/07/07
Interesting meter, and subject. The ending was a nice touch, I hadn't though you were going there. I'm not certain I followed all the metaphors, though. while the subject remained the same, it seemed the writing kept coming from a new direction, rather than carrying it through.
09/09/07
Interesting imagery - I'm also not sure I understand it all, but it definitely had quite a voice. Keep writing!
09/09/07
Truly unique! I had a bit o trouble following it also, though I guessed a mosquito was the bad guy, and then, the victim!
Ah, yes, a mosquito, that helps! You had me scratching my head there in more ways than one. ;-) I'm anxious to read more of your writings! I like your style.