The Official Writing Challenge
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07/21/07
Enjoyed this - much truth in these words. Your rhythm tripped me up a little, but it may just have been me. Keep writing!
07/21/07
Enjoyed this - much truth in these words. Your rhythm tripped me up a little, but it may just have been me. Keep writing!
07/22/07
I enjoyed the unique rhyming style you use, here. I agree that the rhythm could use some attention. I like to compare first line with first line of each stanza, counting syllables and accents to make things "match." Then, do that with second lines, etc. Then, read it aloud to see if the cadence holds or not. You're on your way!
07/24/07
I liked this. Short, but still makes a wonderful point.