The Official Writing Challenge
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A great story, it left me wanting to know what happened next! Well written and an enjoyable read.
I loved your beginning paragraph. It set it up nicely. I think the dialogue was real. I wasn't certain about the way the final conversation was going to take place with all the hustle and bustle going on around them. But you write very nicely!!:)
Wonderful story, and I am looking forward to a sequel to this. Great dialog, reflecting such real life. Great Job!
Oh, yes! Wonderful dialogue! I felt like I was 'right there' in the place and in the moment. You have created characters whom the reader can really care about. No easy feat!! Great job!
I agree with Terri's comments about the setting of the story, but I loved the line: "Sarah plopped down on the floor..." The last line was a nice concluding sentence. You gave us enough for now; you left us with hope. Good job!
You have such a delightful writing style, so easy to slip into your story, getting acquainted with your characters. My only regret, I got to the end of the story so fast!
Joanne, this was such a great story and well written, too. As someone else mentioned, I'm looking forward to a continual. I'm learning so much from your writing style. God Bless! Carol Gray
Enjoyed this read. Good story.