The Official Writing Challenge
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08/07/06
Good job. You wrote evocatively and sensitively. Good message.
08/07/06
I enjoyed this. You did a wonderful job of showing us each of the children on the bus, as well as the mom's anguish. Fine writing!
08/07/06
Nicely written with very natural dialogue. You've done a great job of sharing how difficult it can be for mothers who want to earn an income and yet keep their children their #1 priority. Well done.
08/15/06
I'm in a sweat and short of breath. (I think I held my breath through your entire story, trying to keep up with your narrator!) My, but you know how to do powerful writing, and right on topic also. Thank you for this glimpse into the difficulties so many face, trying to do so much and still hold onto priorities. Keep writing!
08/15/06
p.s. I just checked your member page, and I had to add you to my "track" list! It's so nice to "meet" you, Donna! I'll be "watching" you!